” We were within a mile-and-a-half of the service roads when we found it.”
I just couldn’t believe my luck, and all but screamed as I ran towards it. “Oh my God, Alan, it actually exists!”
He jogged up to the spot, the grin splitting his face, so I realised he was just as excited as me. “I can’t believe it! That daft old man was telling the truth.”
“The last one in is a loser!” I flicked off my shoes and my jacket.
Not surprisingly, Alan ran faster than I did and he hit the water first. It had the opposite effect from what we had been told, but it was too late for me to stop myself.
It was not exactly a slow death, but as I looked into the sky I realised why there were vultures circling. The last thing I saw was the old man laughing to himself.
“Young idiots believe anything. Fountain of youth indeed. Honestly.” He shuffled away and left his pets to feed.
Written for flash fiction for the purposeful practitioner
AngieTrafford 
Very creepy.The fountain of youth kills you. I always thought there had to be something wrong a story about a fountain which granted you more life. Something like the fruit which Eve at in the garden of Eden, People think it’s good, it will make things better. But it makes things worse, kills you in this case. Well written Angie.
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Glad you enjoyed it! I definitely don’t believe a fountain can make everything right, maybe I’m just a cynic!
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Oh…My….. I thought that there was going to be a twist… But goodness! Enjoyed the story! Thanks for participating in Week #3! Hope to see you next week!
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Twists are what I do best! Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it!
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I love the twist. The “Fountain of Youth” aging people to near death is horrifying, especially that it doesn’t actually kill them, it just leaves them defenseless with the vultures circling.
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Great take Angie, enjoyed your tale of deceit and pet food…..
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Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it!
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Wonderful story! They thought they were jumping into the Fountain of Youth but the old man tricked them. It is sad that they were dying in the pool. Loved it!
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Daft old men can fool anybody! Thanks for reading.
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Brilliant twist, Angie! I kinda like the old guy 😀
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He kinda rocks! Thanks for reading.
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Loved the twist. A nice take. I must admit I struggled a little this week 😉
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A struggle can lead to great ideas! Thanks for reading.
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What a great story! You could write a very good novel about the adventures around this place!
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That is a very good idea for a NaNoWriMo project somewhere in the future. Thanks for reading and giving me that idea 🙂
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If possible, let me know if you do. I would really like to read it.
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I will definitely let you know if I can build up enough ideas to do this 🙂
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Good luck!
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It is funny when you think about the fact that it was an ‘old man’ that told them where to find the ‘Fountain of Youth.’ Wonderdful!
http://yolandarenee.blogspot.com/2016/01/doppelganger.html
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Sorry about that – I meant wonderful! 🙂
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Yeah, they should have noticed that flaw, but missed it.Thanks for reading.
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